challenges us to write a
When I am walking down the street
I smile at everyone I meet.
Sometimes they smile right back at me
And that is reciprocity, and rather sweet.
But sometimes, as I walk to town
My smile is answered with a frown
Or else a look that's really sour,
A look that one could call a glower! That gets me down.
Today was damp and draggly;
The rain came mizzling down.
Not much colour anywhere;
Nature wore a frown.
And then a flock of lorikeets
Came swooping down to feed!
Red and green and yellow too!
A welcome sight indeed!
Yes, reciprocity of smiles does feel really good. It is such a small thing, but if someone frowns in response it feels large. You accomplished the form well!
Your florette flows along with a lovely beat, and a subtle change in tone between the two stanzas. And kudos for using reciprocity as the rhyming word. Wow!
love it! hah!
I like reciprocity, the poem and the happening! Perhaps the smiles that aren't reciprocated will go into your karma account! :o)
My hat is off to you for your lovely poem using the form...I love smiles that are returned and those grumpy looks are a bit disconcerting.
You used reciprocity so well, and the smiles and frowns really worked well with this form. Loved the second poem as well.
i liked reciprocity a lot also.
you really do well with this form, i wonder why ;)
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Very nice form and I agree, when people smile at me, my day is more cheerful ~
Nice, lighthearted take on this form - suited it well...
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