Monday, October 11, 2010



Aim: to write a story in 140 characters or less.

As the train drew in she said 'Oh hell!
I've left my tickets at the hotel!'
This was, for her, the grand finale.
She never ever got to Bali!



Back-yard science to the fore.
Fun to splash and fun to pour.
Fun to feel and to submerge.
Fun to give-in to the urge
To throw water at your Dad!
Look! He isn't even mad!
This is where we'll learn about
Cup and measure, bowl and spout.
This is where the toys of plastic
Really are a boon fantasic.
Fun to give the flowers a drink,
Fun to see if teddies sink!
Make it bubble! Make it fizz!
Find out just what water IS!
Splishing, sploshing, keeping cool.
What a delightful back-yard school!


Deborah said...

Very good!

Annie Jeffries said...

Oh dear. That wasn't the happy ending that I always look for. Looks like she went "Bali up".

Gemma Wiseman said...

A fun little zany micro! ASnd the little rhyme about water is a great description of water play in a child's world!

Diane said...

Great MM and cute photo of the babe! :O)

Erratic Thoughts said...

Microfiction is a pure joy to read!
Aww!Poem is so nice, it reminds me of my childhood...
"delightful back-yard school" so good a metaphor is that...

Jim said...

Oh dear, Brenda! The 'last train to Bali' and she missed it!

I like it! I like your poem, rhyme, nine syllable, and all, too. :)
At first I thought your title was misspelt but then Mrs. Google told me that the Brits also spell our 'realization' that way, with an "S".
I.e. a British 'variation.'

I have almost learnt the British language as our daughter, hubby, and bairns have moved to London.

Bill ~ {The Old Fart} said...

Poor Dear, lets hope the Railway will let her rebook her journey.

Peggy said...

Hopefully she traded her ticket in and flew to Bali. I hear that might be a better way to get there.
Very good!
My first time here, at you blog.
Nice to meet a new friend.

Kim, USA said...

Like your shots. Is that you on the first photo? Thanks for the visit and happy weekdays ahead!
Indian Corn
Favorite Snack

Sylvia K said...

Love your micro for the day and always love to see kids playing in the water! Great post for the day, Brenda1


Darlene said...

I'm glad your first poem was fiction because it describes a nightmare I have over and over. In my dream I am supposed to start an exciting trip and I miss my train or ship.

Anonymous said...

Such a shame. Poor lady :O0 Bless!

Stephanie said...

Kudos on your microfiction...very clever

Chubby Chieque said...

Fantastic macro, what I can see.

Have more fun, when you still summer soon weather is in the air.

Happy Day!

Greetings from Stockholm,

One Prayer Girl said...

Oh well, I'm thinking she might not have made it to Bali by train anyway. :)

Nice MFM.



Ms.Daisy said...

Impressed by the sweet 140 poem! I've read it several times and like it better with every reading!

Is there anything more fun for a child than playing in water? Whether it is a puddle or a fountain or a big washbasin! Love your "water poem."


Mary said...

Glad you enjoyed your recognition today on Poets United. Well deserved!

Pblacksaw said...

I love it.. and it sounds like my luck.. have a great day!

Ellie Garratt said...

Oh, no. Poor thing. I loved your MM - it fitted so much in so few words!

Have a great week x

Kay L. Davies said...

Love the water poem, Brenda.
And that train -- if I can find one that leaves Canada for Bali, I'll be on it.

Kay, Alberta

Sioux Roslawski said...

It's succinct AND it rhymes! Wow!