Friday, August 6, 2010

Oh Watering-Can!


(An attempt at a Sonnet!)

Oh watering-can , thou succourer of the flowers,
Left, hastily, upon the garden wall!
Built sturdily to freshen garden bowers
And make the hollyhocks climb up so tall!
She left you, as she hastened to a lover,
Half-filled and ready to be poured!
You waited, but, in time, you would discover
Mere metal is no match for one adored!
The leaves enfold you now with soft caresses,
As though they feel a certain sympathy.
But Nature, ever outwardly progresses!
Soon you will be enveloped by a tree!
You will be lost for ever, in the greenery.
No more a well-loved part of garden scenery!



                                       Margaret Gosden

(My friend Margaret supplied the artwork: I wrote the poem specifically for it.)


He left her house in the moonlight.
His words had not prevailed.
He had begged, he had told her he loved her,
He had grovelled, but he had failed.
So he walked the long path to heartbreak,
The long path that had no end,
With only a shadow companion.
And a heart that would never mend.



cosmos cami said...

I love it: Mere metal is no match for one adored!

Kathe W. said...

This was a great read...with only a shadow companion.

Aoife.Troxel said...

I loved both of these. And your attempt at a sonnet I would say is a success. I love the rhymes!

Pau Andrew Russell said...

I really enjoyed reading this. :-)

Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall said...

beautiful words.
great perspective.

Helen said...

Poor watering can ... I can think of worse fates than being left alone in the garden ... nice writing!

steveroni said...

Liked your Magpie.

LOVED your "Jilted"

My Mag is HERE

Catalyst said...

I am in awe of your talent!!!

annell4 said...

I liked it too. Thank you.

Angie Muresan said...

Is this your first time attempting a sonnet? You did an amazing job!

Paul Oakley said...

Really enjoyed your watering can sonnet. It had the feel of a still life painting, capturing that moment before growth and change obscures the artefact that tells us something of the moment about to be lost. Nice!

Tumblewords: said...

Mere metal and broken hearts. How lovely - and your writing is superb.

vivienne blake said...

I love the sonnet. Let's hope a robin will find the watering can and build a nest there.

Rob Kistner used the same photo for his poem "Still".

Brian Miller said...

jilted has such a cold familiar feel to it..

Unknown said...

Loved both poems! Your watering-can sonnet is fine. "Mere metal is no match for one adored!" definitely the best line!

Elizabeth said...

Bravo! You are far braver than I. I really liked both pieces, but have really enjoyed all of the responses to this particular prompt. Stretching is good, fun, and worth the effort.


Sue J said...

I enjoyed both pieces. Well done.

Wayne Pitchko said...

both nicely done....and thanks...nice art also

Mary said...

You did well with the sonnet form. Not easy!

Diane T said...

I enjoyed both and love how you think!

gautami tripathy said...

Liked both..

now it is there, now it isn't

Anonymous said...

you did it! You can check sonnet off your list!

signed...bkm said...

excellent write and always splendid rhyme....blessings...bkm

~T~ said...

Nice sonnet! Pour--I mean, Poor watering can. And poor jilted guy. I love how you pair your poems.

Helena said...

Again, you never fail to please. I adore your rhymes! To date your Magpie 24 is my fave - I keep going back to have a read!

Deb said...

Ah, dear can, enveloped by the growing green.

PattiKen said...

Both of these are wonderful.

Kavita said...

Lovely rhymes, and a sad but beautiful story too!
I really enjoyed the way it flowed... graceful and to perfection!