Friday, September 3, 2010

A Bite Ago!

chose the illustration.


Do you recall a bite ago,
Before the devastating blow,
Before that dreadful realisation
That we had ruined all Creation?
Remember how soft breezes blew,
And everything was fresh and new,
And how all creatures great and small
Would meekly answer to our call?
Do you recall how days were sweet,
And our relationship complete?
I'd smile, you'd smile, soft words were spoken;
I'd give you daisies as a token.
Nothing ventured, nothing planned;
Though, sometimes, I would touch your hand.
It had been like that since time began.
What was Woman? What was Man?
Every day was just the same
As we wandered, naked, without shame.
And then you picked! And then you bit!
Oh dear! That was the end of it!
Lor Lummy! Eve! What have you done!
Come on, gal! Let's have some fun!

(An Acrostic)

'Which way, what way, why and how?'
Our questions in the here and now.
Recently, not long ago,
Lots of us were flush with dough.
Dabbling in stocks and shares
Everything caught us unawares!
Countries widely separated
Overnight became related.
Nothing could save us! We went under!
Overdrawn! It was no wonder.
Megabucks went down the drain.
You and I caught in the rain!


Marilyn & Jeff said...

Wonderful! I loved it, what fun.

Kathe W. said...

Perfect perfect...bravo!

annell4 said...

I liked them both....yes it was created perfect, why is man so flawed? I'm wondering lately if it is the nature of man, the way he is created. Perfect in this creation. And now it is man, who has decided he has an addiction he would like to cure? Change is difficult especially if it is the nature of the beast. Do you think you could change a tiger? Teach him to have manners?

Amanda Moore said...

this was very cute your last two lines being a perfect ending to set the rhythm of the poem. Mine was similar in its first man and women indications!

Janice said...

Two very enjoyable, clever pieces. Great magpie work! Thanks for visiting me...

Sue J said...

Oh the start of it all - an apple. Great Magpie :)

Helen said...

Love the feeling and flow of your Magpie ... and, the acrostic too!

Doctor FTSE said...

A most entertaining response to the prompt. Very enjoyable. Thank you.

Gabriela Abalo said...

Let's have some fun! that is my motto :)

A very nice Magpie, really enjoyed it.

Brian Miller said...

it does leave one to wonder there thoughts in that moment after...nice mag!

Claudia said...

a bite ago - wonderful writing - yeah and so sad she took the apple

here's my magpie

Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall said...

thought provoking...
lovely done!

Deborah said...

Effortlessy written, just wonderful!

Tess Kincaid said...

I like the biblical twist here. And the title is just perfect!

Jinksy said...

Two for the price of one has to be good! :)

Tumblewords: said...

Wonderfully readable and suitably ponderable!

Tattered and Lost said...

I love the idea of Adam and Eve just sitting around talking about memories.

Reflections said...

Both well written, with just a reference to the beginnings of decision and free will.

And how our free will has effected this economy, hasn't it?

Caty said...

oh to be back before she bit the apple. what a fun magpie, i enjoyed the flow of it too!

Anonymous said...

FANTASTIC!!! I am thrilled about this poem, cuz you know what! You have written it from Adam's point of view, and I have focused on Eve in my Mag! :)
This is amazing!! Two "great blogger minds" thought alike... heheheh
I am so glad I came by!!!

THOROUGHLY enjoyed this "first" story!! :)