Friday, March 12, 2010


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I came down the aisle in my veil of white
Hoping that everything would be all right.
I'd been having doubts for a week or two;
Hadn't been sure of what I should do.
A hint of aggression had marred his tone;
He'd been brusque when we were all alone.
It was as though I belonged to him!
Thoughts of the future became more grim.
His kisses still promised the same old passion,
But marred in an almost cruel fashion!
I tossed and turned, gnawing on my choices,
Hearing in my mind a dozen voices....
My mother ' But, darling, the dress is made!'
My Father 'Look at what I've already paid!'
My friends ' You're going to be filthy rich!'
My Aunt 'It's really too late to switch'.
My own voice added to the chorus
'Maybe things will work out for us.'
He turned and smiled as I came up the aisle,
But was it just a 'mouth-only' smile?
I went through the motions, trembling, shaking.
Was this an awful risk I was taking?
He'd insisted on that 'obedient' clause,
And I'd given-in to him because
After all, as a business man of standing,
He was bound to be quite demanding.
But, goaded, when it came to that word 
(And I know that this will sound absurd)
I suddenly let-out a heartfelt cry!
From the depths of my heart I yelled 'Modify!'
The congregation, stiffened and stirred;
He blanched when he heard my daring word,
Blanched and clenched his teeth as well.
I picked up my skirts and ran like hell!

A 'Charles Dickens' approach here:


Dee Martin said...

haha smart girl - I was so hoping she would run in the end!

Kat said...

To be fair, they must introduce the Obedient and Disobedient clauses..!!

Brave girl.

Thom Gabrukiewicz said...

very smart woman.
Funny how several women picked up on obedient and veil to write wedding posts.

EG CameraGirl said...

Wonderful! She made the right decision at last. That was close! :)

Margaret Gosden said...

It is time those wedding vows were rewritten - one wonders why they haven't been already!

Andy Sewina said...

Dead good, loved the last line, wasn't expecting that!!

Americanising Desi said...

:) wonderful!