MAGPIE TALES
OH WATERING-CAN!
(An attempt at a Sonnet!)
Oh watering-can , thou succourer of the flowers,
Left, hastily, upon the garden wall!
Built sturdily to freshen garden bowers
And make the hollyhocks climb up so tall!
She left you, as she hastened to a lover,
Half-filled and ready to be poured!
You waited, but, in time, you would discover
Mere metal is no match for one adored!
The leaves enfold you now with soft caresses,
As though they feel a certain sympathy.
But Nature, ever outwardly progresses!
Soon you will be enveloped by a tree!
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You will be lost for ever, in the greenery.
No more a well-loved part of garden scenery!
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Margaret Gosden
(My friend Margaret supplied the artwork: I wrote the poem specifically for it.)
JILTED
He left her house in the moonlight.
His words had not prevailed.
He had begged, he had told her he loved her,
He had grovelled, but he had failed.
So he walked the long path to heartbreak,
The long path that had no end,
With only a shadow companion.
And a heart that would never mend.
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28 comments:
Wonderful!
I love it: Mere metal is no match for one adored!
This was a great read...with only a shadow companion.
I loved both of these. And your attempt at a sonnet I would say is a success. I love the rhymes!
I really enjoyed reading this. :-)
beautiful words.
great perspective.
Poor watering can ... I can think of worse fates than being left alone in the garden ... nice writing!
Liked your Magpie.
LOVED your "Jilted"
My Mag is HERE
I am in awe of your talent!!!
I liked it too. Thank you.
Is this your first time attempting a sonnet? You did an amazing job!
Really enjoyed your watering can sonnet. It had the feel of a still life painting, capturing that moment before growth and change obscures the artefact that tells us something of the moment about to be lost. Nice!
Mere metal and broken hearts. How lovely - and your writing is superb.
I love the sonnet. Let's hope a robin will find the watering can and build a nest there.
Rob Kistner used the same photo for his poem "Still".
jilted has such a cold familiar feel to it..
Loved both poems! Your watering-can sonnet is fine. "Mere metal is no match for one adored!" definitely the best line!
Bravo! You are far braver than I. I really liked both pieces, but have really enjoyed all of the responses to this particular prompt. Stretching is good, fun, and worth the effort.
Elizabeth
I enjoyed both pieces. Well done.
both nicely done....and thanks...nice art also
You did well with the sonnet form. Not easy!
I enjoyed both and love how you think!
Liked both..
now it is there, now it isn't
you did it! You can check sonnet off your list!
excellent write and always splendid rhyme....blessings...bkm
Nice sonnet! Pour--I mean, Poor watering can. And poor jilted guy. I love how you pair your poems.
Again, you never fail to please. I adore your rhymes! To date your Magpie 24 is my fave - I keep going back to have a read!
Ah, dear can, enveloped by the growing green.
Both of these are wonderful.
Lovely rhymes, and a sad but beautiful story too!
I really enjoyed the way it flowed... graceful and to perfection!
Bravo!
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