Sunday, August 22, 2010

The Commuter


ONE SINGLE IMPRESSION
'PENSIVE'

THE COMMUTER

Pensive, withdrawn, silent.
Listlessly lolling, unobtrusive, rocked by motion.
Rocked by emotion? Who can tell?
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TALK SHOW!
(An Acrostic)

Tut tut! Too bad! Good God! Not that!
All it takes is a bit of chat!
Lust and love and lies abound
Kiss-and-tell is often found!
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Sudden revelations wow!
How did it happen? Tell us how!
Oh my goodness! You don't say!
What gossip will we hear today?
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22 comments:

Jim said...

Hi RR ~~ I like both of these a lot!

Pensive, on it I tapped my two fingers to the 'beat' and it built up like a locomotive building up speed and steam. Try it!

You talk show acrostic is true to form for the most of them. My faves are Letterman and Regis & Kelly. Most I cannot stand.
Do you get these over in the Au?
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MARGARET GOSDEN 2 said...

I do like the appropriate brevity of both - so apt in the first one and the less said the better in the second one!

Leo said...

Ah, that pensive is so true.. deciphering their emotions is so difficult..

gautami tripathy said...

I liked both.

a trophy

Greyscale Territory said...

Love how you turned the rocking motion into emotion! I alsways feel the train carriage is filled with enforced pensive thoughts!

Talk shows? Ummmm... Not my idea of entertainment! But like your acrostic take of their features!

Married to Singaporean said...

Like the first one, the pensive is so true...

Systematic Weasel said...

It's rather hard to distinguish emotions on the computer. Often, it's just misinterpreted. I liked both of these! Great post!

-Weasel =)

Sandra (if) said...

I enjoyed this!

Maggie said...

The pensive Commuter is a perfect capture of a People Watcher...I enjoyed both.

Jenn Jilks said...

good job!

Aoife.Troxel said...

I would say the commuter is rocked by emotion. I do my deepest thinking in vehicles. One does wonder, looking at everyone around them, what thoughts are in their head?
And talk shows...I don't really like them but I like your poem, you really captured the feelings surrounding talk shows. :)

ρομπερτ said...

A very well felt entry of yours. You certainly have the ability to see differently. Please have a good new week.

daily athens

twitches said...

Love both of these - that first one has a great ending!

Annie said...

I really liked The Commuter. It made me think of another setting which creates the same feelings - for me that would be elevators.

SandyCarlson said...

Thanks for your contribution to OSI. It is hard to know what a person is thinking or feeling. So easy to get it wrong. That's why we must tread carefully.

Ramesh Sood said...

Rock it did..yes, lovely I liked both.. RR that's easier to take..

Will wait for you to bless my 100th..post..

Tumblewords: said...

Difficult to read emotions, usually! Excellent piece. I dislike talk shows but like your delightful acrostic!

ms pie said...

have captured the commuter!....

RiikaInfinityy said...

Amazing! Thank for sharing =D It is great to be reading your wonderful works=3

Lisa at Greenbow said...

These are just great. I often look at people and wonder their story. The second is so true.

gabrielle said...

The rocking motion of trains is the perfect vehicle for pensive.
Talk Show is such a good foil for the mood you created in pensive.
Well done!

Patti said...

I liked both but really connected with the first. How often we look at another and wonder- really wonder what is going on inside? One of my fav sayings is "everybody has a story..." so very true!