Monday, July 18, 2011

Whispers




POETRY POTLUCK
suggested we 'paint whispers'. I chose an artwork that suggested 'whispering' to me and added an Acrostic.


 WHISPERS
(A Nightmare')

Whispering .......and that whispering seems
Hushed, yet echoing in my dreams.
Intimate, it's very near
Softly speaking in my ear.
Patiently, throughout the night,
Ever murmuring 'Wrong is right'.
Repeating ever and again
'Submit, and you will feel no pain.'

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THE FRINGE

Standing sentinel by the Lake are the lovely Norfolk Pines
With their enchanting symmetry and satisfying lines.
They enhance a watery aspect, so they're planted by the shore
Of lakes and rivers and the beach, within the ocean's roar.
They're natives of Norfolk Island, a mere dot in the sea,
Where the sailors from the 'Bounty' came after the Mutiny.
It's a holiday destination for Australians, like me
Being only just eight miles across, but full of history.
I recall my island holiday each time I see the lines
And the noble dark green foliage of our many Norfolk pines.
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10 comments:

PhotoDiction said...

"Whispers" is a very powerful piece. It certainly twists to a potential nightmare from the first 4 lines to the last 4. Wonderfully done :)

Mia said...

really loved the fringe

Marbles in My Pocket said...

I like what you did with whispers. Excellent composing that came out sounding wonderful.

Gigi Ann said...

I liked the Whispers poem, very creative.

dragonkatet said...

These were both fantastic pieces! :) I like them both but for different reasons. You did a very good job with the acrostic and I loved the rhymes and description in "The Fringe". The acrostic was indeed a nightmare...creepy. But well done!

dragonkatet said...

P.S. Together with that first image, "Whispers" kind of reminded me of the Borg from Star Trek.

Jingle said...

creative,

love your acrostics.

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Wonderful acrostic Whispers!

mindlovemisery said...

I love that there is something sinister almost about the first poem is mesmerizing, haunting, and powerful and the second poem is lovely and educational!

Tigerbrite said...

I liked both pieces too for the same reasons.