Monday, October 18, 2010

The Prisoner


MICROFICTION

THE PRISONER!

To paraphrase....'A delicious feast
To eat beneath the bough!
A loaf of bread, a jug of wine!
But lover, where art thou!
You've thrown me in the dungeon
And I only broke one vow!'

("A loaf of bread, a jug of wine, and thou...." Omar Khayyam.)

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DAWN DAZZLE

When the summer's at its hottest,
When the sun's a cruel beast,
Then we favour early morning,
And the pageant from the east.
Get up early, get the gear on,
Venture out before it's light.
Feel the gentle breeze that's blowing,
Share the remnants of the night.
See the lovely silver pathway
As the sun begins to rise!
Such deceptive gentle glowing!
Such a devil in disguise!
All too soon we feel the burning,
All too soon the sun turns gold.
Home to breakfast and a shower.
The shiny tale of morning's told.
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17 comments:

gospelwriter said...

Darn! I think we needed another 20 or so characters, now I'll never know which vow she broke. :) Nice!

Kay L. Davies said...

Makes one wonder which one vow, Brenda.
Good paraphrase of Omar Khayyam.
And I love your Dawn Dazzle. It explains how I feel about summer, completely.

Kay, Alberta

Peggy said...

A loaf of bread, a jug of wine and thee!
Liked your take on the picture.
Very sweet!

Stephanie said...

Love the rhyme...very clever...here's mine
http://stephiles.blogspot.com/2010/10/microfiction-monday-bricked-in.html

Sylvia K said...

Fun take on the pic of the day! Glad to see you join the fun! Hope you have a great week, Brenda!

Sylvia

Pat said...

Hmmm...Which vow did she break? We can only imagine. Wonderful pooetic interpretation of this week's picture.

I really liked the Dawn Dazzle poem, too--lovely!

the replicant said...

Delightfully lyrical.

anthonynorth said...

That must have been quite a vow to break :-)
Nice one.

Leovi said...

Great poetry, I like to live that experience in summer. Furthermore, these hours are very good for creativity, because after sleeping mind is rested. Thank you very much for your kind words. A greeting.

Lisa Ricard Claro said...

Enjoyed the microfiction and the poem that followed. I do not excel at poetry, so I appreciate it all the more because I'm envious! Terrific story, and lovely poetry.

MorningAJ said...

Must have been a serious one!

Diane said...

So clever.... love it! :O)

septembermom said...

That must have been one strict vow. Great job with the microfiction. I enjoyed your poem too!

Madeleine said...

I really enjoyed both the poems. Excellent. :O)

Susan Fobes said...

Oh so curious about that one vow... LOL!

hope said...

Seems she REALLY messed up.

evenstarwen said...

Poor girl. Doesn't everyone deserve another chance?