Friday, August 6, 2010

Oh Watering-Can!


MAGPIE TALES

OH WATERING-CAN!
(An attempt at a Sonnet!)

Oh watering-can , thou succourer of the flowers,
Left, hastily, upon the garden wall!
Built sturdily to freshen garden bowers
And make the hollyhocks climb up so tall!
She left you, as she hastened to a lover,
Half-filled and ready to be poured!
You waited, but, in time, you would discover
Mere metal is no match for one adored!
The leaves enfold you now with soft caresses,
As though they feel a certain sympathy.
But Nature, ever outwardly progresses!
Soon you will be enveloped by a tree!
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You will be lost for ever, in the greenery.
No more a well-loved part of garden scenery!
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                                       Margaret Gosden

(My friend Margaret supplied the artwork: I wrote the poem specifically for it.)


JILTED

He left her house in the moonlight.
His words had not prevailed.
He had begged, he had told her he loved her,
He had grovelled, but he had failed.
So he walked the long path to heartbreak,
The long path that had no end,
With only a shadow companion.
And a heart that would never mend.

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28 comments:

  1. cosmos camiAugust 6, 2010 at 2:40 PM

    Wonderful!
    I love it: Mere metal is no match for one adored!

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  2. Kathe W.August 6, 2010 at 3:38 PM

    This was a great read...with only a shadow companion.

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  3. Aoife.TroxelAugust 6, 2010 at 11:28 PM

    I loved both of these. And your attempt at a sonnet I would say is a success. I love the rhymes!

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  4. Pau Andrew RussellAugust 7, 2010 at 12:09 AM

    I really enjoyed reading this. :-)

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  5. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallAugust 7, 2010 at 12:33 AM

    beautiful words.
    great perspective.

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  6. HelenAugust 7, 2010 at 2:23 AM

    Poor watering can ... I can think of worse fates than being left alone in the garden ... nice writing!

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  7. steveroniAugust 7, 2010 at 4:35 AM

    Liked your Magpie.

    LOVED your "Jilted"

    My Mag is HERE

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  8. CatalystAugust 7, 2010 at 5:44 AM

    I am in awe of your talent!!!

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  9. annell4August 7, 2010 at 5:52 AM

    I liked it too. Thank you.

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  10. Angie MuresanAugust 7, 2010 at 6:20 AM

    Is this your first time attempting a sonnet? You did an amazing job!

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  11. Paul OakleyAugust 7, 2010 at 8:10 AM

    Really enjoyed your watering can sonnet. It had the feel of a still life painting, capturing that moment before growth and change obscures the artefact that tells us something of the moment about to be lost. Nice!

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  12. Tumblewords:August 7, 2010 at 9:36 AM

    Mere metal and broken hearts. How lovely - and your writing is superb.

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  13. vivienne blakeAugust 7, 2010 at 5:57 PM

    I love the sonnet. Let's hope a robin will find the watering can and build a nest there.

    Rob Kistner used the same photo for his poem "Still".

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  14. Brian MillerAugust 7, 2010 at 8:26 PM

    jilted has such a cold familiar feel to it..

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  15. UnknownAugust 8, 2010 at 12:15 AM

    Loved both poems! Your watering-can sonnet is fine. "Mere metal is no match for one adored!" definitely the best line!

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  16. ElizabethAugust 8, 2010 at 1:04 AM

    Bravo! You are far braver than I. I really liked both pieces, but have really enjoyed all of the responses to this particular prompt. Stretching is good, fun, and worth the effort.

    Elizabeth

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  17. Sue JAugust 8, 2010 at 10:48 AM

    I enjoyed both pieces. Well done.

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  18. Wayne PitchkoAugust 8, 2010 at 11:02 AM

    both nicely done....and thanks...nice art also

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  19. MaryAugust 8, 2010 at 11:52 AM

    You did well with the sonnet form. Not easy!

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  20. Diane TAugust 8, 2010 at 12:06 PM

    I enjoyed both and love how you think!

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  21. gautami tripathyAugust 8, 2010 at 1:02 PM

    Liked both..

    now it is there, now it isn't

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  22. AnonymousAugust 9, 2010 at 5:04 AM

    you did it! You can check sonnet off your list!

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  23. signed...bkmAugust 9, 2010 at 3:41 PM

    excellent write and always splendid rhyme....blessings...bkm

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  24. ~T~August 10, 2010 at 2:04 AM

    Nice sonnet! Pour--I mean, Poor watering can. And poor jilted guy. I love how you pair your poems.

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  25. HelenaAugust 10, 2010 at 3:13 AM

    Again, you never fail to please. I adore your rhymes! To date your Magpie 24 is my fave - I keep going back to have a read!

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  26. DebAugust 10, 2010 at 1:59 PM

    Ah, dear can, enveloped by the growing green.

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  27. PattiKenAugust 10, 2010 at 2:17 PM

    Both of these are wonderful.

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  28. KavitaAugust 10, 2010 at 6:14 PM

    Lovely rhymes, and a sad but beautiful story too!
    I really enjoyed the way it flowed... graceful and to perfection!
    Bravo!

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