Sunday, August 22, 2010

The Commuter


ONE SINGLE IMPRESSION
'PENSIVE'

THE COMMUTER

Pensive, withdrawn, silent.
Listlessly lolling, unobtrusive, rocked by motion.
Rocked by emotion? Who can tell?
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TALK SHOW!
(An Acrostic)

Tut tut! Too bad! Good God! Not that!
All it takes is a bit of chat!
Lust and love and lies abound
Kiss-and-tell is often found!
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Sudden revelations wow!
How did it happen? Tell us how!
Oh my goodness! You don't say!
What gossip will we hear today?
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22 comments:

  1. JimAugust 22, 2010 at 2:42 PM

    Hi RR ~~ I like both of these a lot!

    Pensive, on it I tapped my two fingers to the 'beat' and it built up like a locomotive building up speed and steam. Try it!

    You talk show acrostic is true to form for the most of them. My faves are Letterman and Regis & Kelly. Most I cannot stand.
    Do you get these over in the Au?
    ..

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  2. Margaret Gosden August 22, 2010 at 6:32 PM

    I do like the appropriate brevity of both - so apt in the first one and the less said the better in the second one!

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  3. Vinay Leo R.August 22, 2010 at 6:38 PM

    Ah, that pensive is so true.. deciphering their emotions is so difficult..

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  4. gautami tripathyAugust 22, 2010 at 6:44 PM

    I liked both.

    a trophy

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  5. Gemma Wiseman aka Pamela AdamsAugust 22, 2010 at 8:07 PM

    Love how you turned the rocking motion into emotion! I alsways feel the train carriage is filled with enforced pensive thoughts!

    Talk shows? Ummmm... Not my idea of entertainment! But like your acrostic take of their features!

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  6. Married to SingaporeanAugust 22, 2010 at 11:18 PM

    Like the first one, the pensive is so true...

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  7. WeaselAugust 22, 2010 at 11:20 PM

    It's rather hard to distinguish emotions on the computer. Often, it's just misinterpreted. I liked both of these! Great post!

    -Weasel =)

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  8. Sandra.ifAugust 23, 2010 at 1:43 AM

    I enjoyed this!

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  9. MaggieAugust 23, 2010 at 2:56 AM

    The pensive Commuter is a perfect capture of a People Watcher...I enjoyed both.

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  10. Jenn JilksAugust 23, 2010 at 3:17 AM

    good job!

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  11. Aoife.TroxelAugust 23, 2010 at 5:52 AM

    I would say the commuter is rocked by emotion. I do my deepest thinking in vehicles. One does wonder, looking at everyone around them, what thoughts are in their head?
    And talk shows...I don't really like them but I like your poem, you really captured the feelings surrounding talk shows. :)

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  12. AnonymousAugust 23, 2010 at 8:03 AM

    A very well felt entry of yours. You certainly have the ability to see differently. Please have a good new week.

    daily athens

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  13. mareymercyAugust 23, 2010 at 8:09 AM

    Love both of these - that first one has a great ending!

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  14. Annie JeffriesAugust 23, 2010 at 9:13 AM

    I really liked The Commuter. It made me think of another setting which creates the same feelings - for me that would be elevators.

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  15. SandyCarlsonAugust 23, 2010 at 12:31 PM

    Thanks for your contribution to OSI. It is hard to know what a person is thinking or feeling. So easy to get it wrong. That's why we must tread carefully.

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  16. Ramesh SoodAugust 24, 2010 at 1:04 AM

    Rock it did..yes, lovely I liked both.. RR that's easier to take..

    Will wait for you to bless my 100th..post..

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  17. Tumblewords:August 24, 2010 at 2:43 AM

    Difficult to read emotions, usually! Excellent piece. I dislike talk shows but like your delightful acrostic!

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  18. ms pieAugust 25, 2010 at 9:09 AM

    have captured the commuter!....

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  19. RiikaInfinityyAugust 25, 2010 at 4:25 PM

    Amazing! Thank for sharing =D It is great to be reading your wonderful works=3

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  20. Lisa at GreenbowAugust 26, 2010 at 7:02 AM

    These are just great. I often look at people and wonder their story. The second is so true.

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  21. gabrielleAugust 29, 2010 at 4:23 AM

    The rocking motion of trains is the perfect vehicle for pensive.
    Talk Show is such a good foil for the mood you created in pensive.
    Well done!

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  22. PattiAugust 29, 2010 at 11:35 AM

    I liked both but really connected with the first. How often we look at another and wonder- really wonder what is going on inside? One of my fav sayings is "everybody has a story..." so very true!

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